Human clockwork dolls script idea...

This is what I came up for as my script, obviously at the beginning there will be gaps/ it will be spread out longer as this wouldn't take that long, also this is just a draft so If this idea is chosen, I will hope to be the director of it so I can produce this as well as possible, as no one can actually see into my head, also the narration script for the second part is just a draft and needs to be worked on, it's just a rough outline of what should be said. Also as shown by my screen shots from met notes app on my iPad, the title for my idea is yet to be discovered.


Audience response on the idea…
Mine: It's different from other horror films.
Kaya's idea: the Polaroid photos are a really good idea
Kaya's idea of the police showing the torture
Nursery rhyme is a good idea to create the horror
Need to think of the practicalities